Okay here we go Chapter 1
It's defenitly not finalized yet so bear that in mind while giving advice
Any constructive critism is good I'd prefer it be on writing style but if you think you have any ideas with story or and thing that's unclear feel free to bring it up.
Leave 3 ideas on improvement please and try to keep them original, don't worry about my feelings.
Thanks again everyone here we go.
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