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He always expected to die to the sounds of battle, to the blaring trumpets sounding another charge, to the steady thumping of his soldiers boots, and to the ringing clang of shields and swords colliding.

He had not expected to die like this.

The war-torn plain stood bare of all but 4 men in the freezing night, four men dressed in their armor, ready to fight and win... or die. The king, dressed in simple leather. And the fallen mages, garbed in steel as black as their souls.
The king stood forward and called to them. "After this day, our war is over. Done. No more will you haunt these lands as the spectres you are. No more will you cause my people greif, as you have caused me."

The northernmost mage also stepped forward, and let his voice ring out, a mixture of hundreds, thousands of crying voices. The voices of those he had slain. "Our deal is done. You know the rules, and so do we."

The king drew his long, knotched blade and thrust it into the ground, then knelt before it in prayer.

"If I die this day, let my people remember me. Let them remember how I died. Let them know my story. This story."

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Comment by Jay Bushey on May 4, 2010 at 9:46pm
Great way to start off a story, I can't read "You know the rules, and so do we" without thinking of Rick Astley though haha
Comment by Brad Dickey on May 4, 2010 at 12:04pm
Great first 1 minute of a story. Where is the rest?
Comment by TaylorJae Taber on February 4, 2010 at 2:01pm
Awesome so far it draws the reader in right away talking about someones death and a horrible war. That intro is open for tons of ideas and gets the reader thinking right of the bat "whats gonna happen? What story? what's this about? who are these strange four men? etc.." Great start! :D
Comment by austin becknell on December 16, 2009 at 3:14pm
hye will someone read my intro D:
Comment by Ben hall-gola on December 15, 2009 at 4:36pm
the start of a great story one i would be proud to sink into
Comment by austin becknell on December 14, 2009 at 12:51pm
comment on my story intro as well
Comment by austin becknell on December 14, 2009 at 12:50pm
is the main character a king or a knight a little confused there but awesome more!

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